Last edited by Takoshimo on Sat Feb 17, 2018 6:10 am; edited 1 time in total
Notte Giornata
Fri Feb 16, 2018 8:30 pm
Fri Feb 16, 2018 9:11 pm
I'll be reviewing your application.
Great work on a well-detailed personality and history!
Here are a few edits that'd make the application more complete.
- Tattoo: Mention the color of your tattoo.
- Dislikes: You have an unfinished sentence here. 'end of'? Also, I'd suggest adding at least 1 more dislike.
- Fears: While not achieving the goals that motivate you, is a legitimate thing to fear, it'd be great if you could dig into Notte's personality a little more and find other things to round him up as a character.
- Magic Description: Good job listing the spells you can do. However, examples of objects you can create isn't really required here but will need to be detailed when you make your spells and the utility will depend on rank. (For example, for your class body armors will become a possibility only as an S rank defensive spell). Instead, a bit more explanation of the underlying mechanics of your magic would be nice here.
Bump when you've made the edits!
Sat Feb 17, 2018 7:17 am
This character application has been approved. |
(Note: ""Darkness" is actually a biproduct of well his inner darkness his resent for people his hatred any negative thought he generally has fuels this magic, so vice versa if he's in a good mood his magic is siginificantly weaker." --> This is fine as an RP element, but in an actual battle Notte's mood will have no effect on the stats of the spell, like damage output etc.)
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