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Fri Nov 24, 2023 6:58 pm
General Name: Symbiotic Fleshweave Slot: Armor Type: Flesh Coating Class: Legendary [45] Weight: Medium Quantity: Custom Element: Darkness Durability: 2 S-Rank Details Description: Composed of a genuinely alien substance, this substance at first resembles that of fleshy tendrils and exposed muscles, more like that of the innards of a human body than anything else. In its actual form and purpose, the material grows to that of a type of armor that envelops a wearer, effectively acting as a sort of skin that the wearer is able to manipulate and control. In their wearing of this Symbiotic Fleshweave, the wearer develops a symbiotic relationship with the alien organism, it effectively serving beneath the wearer, providing it with its power, protection, and strengths, while the wearer provides it with the freedom of existence. The true depths of this Fleshweave and the effects that it has over the wearer is one of significant question however, with it not being clear just how this relationship go and the impact that it potentially has upon the wearer, and vice versa how the wearer's behavior and actions influence the development of the Fleshweave. Measurements: The Fleshweave predominantly covers the user's body to varying degrees, forming almost a skintight layer with numerous veins and inconsistent textures littered throughout the entirety of it as it expands over the wearer's body. Thick and black in texture, it almost resembles that of a thick tar being poured upon the body than that of an sort of tight garment that would otherwise be worn. It is overwhelmingly concentrated more within the chest cavity of the wearer, extending down often to the point where it completely covers the wearer's legs. It also reaches out past the wearer's arms, though the length to which it engorges those appendages can be known to vary, extending past the full length of the hand to barely beyond the elbow. Even upon the neck the Fleshweave can cover, though seldom ever does it extend past the upper portions branching into the head area. Bonus:
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Total points Acquired: 45 Total Points Spent: 45 |
Last edited by Astrid on Sat May 04, 2024 2:54 pm; edited 1 time in total
Mon Dec 04, 2023 4:27 pm
Thu Apr 18, 2024 9:40 pm
General Name: Sovereign, the Vanguard of Absolute End Slot: Weapon Type: Scythe Class: Mythic [60] Quantity: Custom Element: Arcane Damage: 150 Durability: 3 S-Rank Details Description: An intricate looking weapon, Sovereign appears like that of a mastercrafted scythe, but upon further inspection one quickly realizes that the weapon, despite it's marvelous qualities, is horrific in nature. First deceptive in its size, the Scythe appears like that of an almost oversized weapon, having a length from its base to the tip of it measuring somewhere between 7 and 8 feet in length, whilst its bladed component seems to extend outwards at a curve measuring over a meter in overall length. Despite this massive size, its handling appears fluid, if not created by material that causes its stature to utterly deceive those who may witness it. Further too, its aesthetic look at times appears almost like that of cut gemstone than that of any solid material, though having inherent sharpness and toughness rivalling that of diamond and other enhanced metals. Lore: An ancient weapon, the origin of quite where a thing as sinister and wicked as Sovereign originated from has long been wondered, but throughout history the only thing that has been certain has been its connection to some of the most depraved actions carried out by man. A weapon referenced once upon a time in the hands of a cruel despot only to resurface against decades, if not centuries, later in the hands of another horrific wielder, Sovereign's own mythos would become something noteworthy in its own right. Time went on and the Scythe remained a focal point of the aspiring cruel tyrant, maniacal cult leader, or other terrorist visionary, how one had come to acquire the weapon remaining a mystery. Some believed the weapon found them. Others speculated it being moved about through underground networks, it would not be until X712 that it would come under the possession of a noble in Fiore, then through a sequence of events ended up in a secret, secure vault of the Fiorian Government. The intent was that being removed from the world, perhaps it would help bring about an era of peace; whatever influence it may have had being erased from the world. And it proved truthful, for a time at least. Quite where the young Senator Astrid Venier came across this weapon is nothing short of a mystery, if not one that the world would forever suffer from. Nevertheless, the woman possessing it, already having in her possession a trove of ancient Magical artifacts that she had managed to secure for herself, along with a Magic that seldom few were even so much aware of its existence, she became an immediate person of interest for the wicked weapon. Whether designed as the vessel to be the next in line to carry out the attempted overthrowing of Earthland as people knew it, or otherwise someone who may have striven for greater ambitions, the mutual interest in both looking to aid the other was immediate resonated. And thus, a union that has no shortage of potential outcomes, all of which terrible, came forth. How Fiore would stand to be impacted though, one has to fear just what the ambitious Senator may do next, even before being aided by a weapon of tyrants and depravity. Measurements: From base to tip, Sovereign has an overall length of just over 2 meters, with handling encompassing over two-thirds of that length. The bladed head protruding from the tip extends a length of nearly a meter when attributing the blade's curve. Extra Requirements: Astrid Venier Effects
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Total points Acquired: 60 Total Points Spent: 60 |
Last edited by Astrid on Sat May 04, 2024 1:46 pm; edited 4 times in total
Fri Apr 19, 2024 7:14 am
The passive is fine, but for the spells we're gonna need to work... a lot~
The first spell: A S-rank defensive spell only intercepts up to 2 S-rank damage, not 4, even with overcharge it only becomes 3 S-rank at best.
You and All That Exists Will Forever Cease:
- Adding a weakness to others is a MM tier effect, and normally only applies a minor effect, in this case it's outright a nope.
- You also added a resistance ignore and defensive properties ignore, which once more are two additional effects.
As a result you currently have:
- Topic Wide
- Flat cost AoE
- Resistance Ignore
- Weakness adding (banned effect)
- Defense ignore
- Selective Targeting
as you see these are way too many effects for a single S++ spell.
I would recommend removing the topic wide for starters, but in general the spell simply has way too many effects currently.
Wed May 08, 2024 10:29 pm
General Name: Symbiotic Fleshweave Slot: Armor Type: Flesh Coating Class: Legendary [45] Weight: Medium Quantity: Custom Element: Darkness Durability: 2 S-Rank Details Description: Composed of a genuinely alien substance, this substance at first resembles that of fleshy tendrils and exposed muscles, more like that of the innards of a human body than anything else. In its actual form and purpose, the material grows to that of a type of armor that envelops a wearer, effectively acting as a sort of skin that the wearer is able to manipulate and control. In their wearing of this Symbiotic Fleshweave, the wearer develops a symbiotic relationship with the alien organism, it effectively serving beneath the wearer, providing it with its power, protection, and strengths, while the wearer provides it with the freedom of existence. The true depths of this Fleshweave and the effects that it has over the wearer is one of significant question however, with it not being clear just how this relationship go and the impact that it potentially has upon the wearer, and vice versa how the wearer's behavior and actions influence the development of the Fleshweave. Measurements: The Fleshweave predominantly covers the user's body to varying degrees, forming almost a skintight layer with numerous veins and inconsistent textures littered throughout the entirety of it as it expands over the wearer's body. Thick and black in texture, it almost resembles that of a thick tar being poured upon the body than that of an sort of tight garment that would otherwise be worn. It is overwhelmingly concentrated more within the chest cavity of the wearer, extending down often to the point where it completely covers the wearer's legs. It also reaches out past the wearer's arms, though the length to which it engorges those appendages can be known to vary, extending past the full length of the hand to barely beyond the elbow. Even upon the neck the Fleshweave can cover, though seldom ever does it extend past the upper portions branching into the head area. Bonus:
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Points Breakdown
Total points Acquired: 45 Total Points Spent: 45 |
Last edited by Astrid on Sun May 12, 2024 3:27 pm; edited 1 time in total
Sun May 12, 2024 3:17 pm
This custom has been approved, please create a copy of the item and the source post in a reply post using its name and rarity for its title in the Customs section. |
Last edited by Saturn on Sun May 12, 2024 3:32 pm; edited 1 time in total
Mon May 20, 2024 9:27 pm
General Name: Sovereign, the Vanguard of Absolute End Slot: Weapon Type: Scythe Class: Legendary [45] Quantity: Custom Element: Arcane Damage: 120 Durability: 2 S-Rank Details Description: An intricate looking weapon, Sovereign appears like that of a mastercrafted scythe, but upon further inspection one quickly realizes that the weapon, despite it's marvelous qualities, is horrific in nature. First deceptive in its size, the Scythe appears like that of an almost oversized weapon, having a length from its base to the tip of it measuring somewhere between 7 and 8 feet in length, whilst its bladed component seems to extend outwards at a curve measuring over a meter in overall length. Despite this massive size, its handling appears fluid, if not created by material that causes its stature to utterly deceive those who may witness it. Further too, its aesthetic look at times appears almost like that of cut gemstone than that of any solid material, though having inherent sharpness and toughness rivalling that of diamond and other enhanced metals. Lore: An ancient weapon, the origin of quite where a thing as sinister and wicked as Sovereign originated from has long been wondered, but throughout history the only thing that has been certain has been its connection to some of the most depraved actions carried out by man. A weapon referenced once upon a time in the hands of a cruel despot only to resurface against decades, if not centuries, later in the hands of another horrific wielder, Sovereign's own mythos would become something noteworthy in its own right. Time went on and the Scythe remained a focal point of the aspiring cruel tyrant, maniacal cult leader, or other terrorist visionary, how one had come to acquire the weapon remaining a mystery. Some believed the weapon found them. Others speculated it being moved about through underground networks, it would not be until X712 that it would come under the possession of a noble in Fiore, then through a sequence of events ended up in a secret, secure vault of the Fiorian Government. The intent was that being removed from the world, perhaps it would help bring about an era of peace; whatever influence it may have had being erased from the world. And it proved truthful, for a time at least. Quite where the young Senator Astrid Venier came across this weapon is nothing short of a mystery, if not one that the world would forever suffer from. Nevertheless, the woman possessing it, already having in her possession a trove of ancient Magical artifacts that she had managed to secure for herself, along with a Magic that seldom few were even so much aware of its existence, she became an immediate person of interest for the wicked weapon. Whether designed as the vessel to be the next in line to carry out the attempted overthrowing of Earthland as people knew it, or otherwise someone who may have striven for greater ambitions, the mutual interest in both looking to aid the other was immediate resonated. And thus, a union that has no shortage of potential outcomes, all of which terrible, came forth. How Fiore would stand to be impacted though, one has to fear just what the ambitious Senator may do next, even before being aided by a weapon of tyrants and depravity. Measurements: From base to tip, Sovereign has an overall length of just over 2 meters, with handling encompassing over two-thirds of that length. The bladed head protruding from the tip extends a length of nearly a meter when attributing the blade's curve. Extra Requirements: Astrid Venier Effects
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Points Breakdown
Total points Acquired: 45 Total Points Spent: 45 |
Mon May 20, 2024 11:46 pm
Thu Aug 01, 2024 9:44 pm
General Name: Baba Yeaga Slot: Armor Type: Coalesced Spirit Hands Class: Mythic [60] Weight: Medium Quantity: Custom Element: Arcane Durability: 4 S-Rank Details Description: An unconventional thing, Baba Yeaga is not a singular item nor piece of equipment but instead rather a collection of floating spirit hands that float in near proximity to whomever they treat as their host. To both the initiated and those in disbelief, they would see Baba Yeaga as the same thing; a collection of dark hands, composed of nothing more than shadowy energy, that linger around the target, often times making physical contact with them. This contact may be nothing more than being so close as to feel the faint energy radiate off of them, the physical caress of the fingers upon one's skin, or even the more apparent - if not aggressive gestures - such as the feeling of a grasp upon one's own throat. These are just some of the physical interactions that can occur, all of them however being limited to that of the single individual whom they congregate on in perpetuity. Their total numbers vary, at times there only appearing to be a small few of them, while at times it could appear that the user is being swarmed by them, evident enough by anyone whom would happen to look upon the user. Lore: Quite what it is remains a mystery. Why it exists is largely one that is unknown, but what is clear is that the thing known as Baba Yeaga - not quite an armor nor that of a creature, but somewhere in between. Baba Yeaga is a collection-like creature, a collection of the disembodied hands of hundreds of thousands of souls whom had been made deceased over the centuries and beyond, all coalescing into a sort of shield-like being that focuses its attention and focus towards a singular being, dubbed the Host. To whomever finds themselves becoming the Host, they will be haunted by the presence of Baba Yeaga, hands that will forever surround them, plaguing them, even going as far as to attempt to physically involve themselves with the Host's body. The reasoning is unclear, nor the drive or impulsiveness that it displays towards a single Host, but it is similarly clear that they exist for and will go to any length imaginable to protect their Host. As such, between its unyielding determination and its endless automation factory of hands of former spirits to pull its existence from, Baba Yeaga is a sort of living armor that will exist only until the Host somehow manages to die or otherwise it finds a more suitable Host to envelop instead. Just how Baba Yeaga happened to find Astrid Venier remains a significant mystery, but it's clear that while many would be horrified by the presence of such a thing, the Phantom Lord Guild Master and Fiorian Senator has come to view Baba Yeaga as a welcome sort of armor. It provides her with a greater protection than anything that she could have at first imagined, behaves almost like a luxury coat that she can adorn and at the same time use to impose her will. And while in frequent and often times rare, the touch of Baba Yeaga is not always unwelcome, sometimes even being a delightful sensation. So much so that even the feeling of the spectral hand upon her throat, squeezing at her neck, even tends to have a more exciting nature to it than one may expect. After all, of what Astrid understands of the living armor, for it to find a Host more capable than her, the only chance of that happening would be upon her natural passing. Everything else is simply a sort of foreplay, their attempt at trying to match the seduction that she casts in her existence, being uniquely gifted in her many talents, as well as the two powerful Souls that exist within her body. An attribute that seldom any would be able to match up against, and one that Baba Yeaga would never turn down. Measurements: Baba Yeaga appears like that of a collection of disembodied hands composed of shadowy spirits, each having the dimensions like that of typical hands, albeit across no shortage of species. Human of both genders and any number of age groups, the same broad categories also apply to any number of races that this may apply for. The shape and size of hands are never the same, them appearing in an infinitely recycled collection of hands that may appear as manifestations of its form. Extra Requirements: Astrid Venier Bonus:
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Points Breakdown Please list Forge Points gained and lost for a faster approval process.
Total points Acquired: 60 Total Points Spent: 60 |
Last edited by Astrid on Sun Sep 01, 2024 10:01 am; edited 1 time in total
Sun Sep 01, 2024 2:47 am
The Lost Lamb Endlessly Seeking Salvation spell inspired by Spell Approved Here
Sun Sep 01, 2024 7:22 am
You'll also need to clarify that you can see through the invisibility portion of the spell with a sensory of equal rank too. Otherwise this looks good.
Sun Sep 01, 2024 10:05 am
As per the second point, I iterate the points in discussion as to it being approvable in its current state. Spell should be good.
Bump.
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