Dane's Starter Spells

**Dane Siph** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 3:56 pm

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

Name: Mist shield
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Mist Fall magic
Type: Defense
Element: Water
Range: .5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 post
Duration: Instant
Effect: The user places any hand out to form a small cloud of mist that when punched hardens into water, this spell is used to block a D-rank spell

Name: Mist wrist guard
Rank: d
Mana Cost: "25|25"
Requirements: Mist Fall Magic
Type: Defensive
Element: water
Range: N/A
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Sustain
Effect: The user swings a hand outwards and two mist circles appear on the users hands and then solidify into water guards capable of taking 1 d-rank spell

Name: Triple Mist Slice
Rank: d
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Mist Fall Magic
Type: Offensive
Element: water
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: the user swings their arm to the side and 3 thin pieces of mist go launching out, after a meter they turn into water capable of slicing, but anytime before a meter they do know damage. Each slice deals 1/3 of a d-rank spell, if all 3 hit it is one d-rank spell.

Name: Mist Jets
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Mist Fall Magic
Type: Supplementary
Element: water
Range: 5 meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: The user makes a pushing motion down with their hands and a jest of mist will extend from each hand eventually morphing into water allowing the user to either move closer to their opponent or farther away propelling him to a max of 5 meters in any direction.

Name: Mist bullets
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Mist Fall Magic
Type: Offensive
Element: Water
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: The user has the points a hand outwards with a punch like motion and 4 mist spheres will shoot out in a line and eventually turn to hard water. Each bullet is worth 1/4 a d-rank spell if all 4 hit its as much of a d-rank spell.

Last edited by Dane on Sat Oct 22, 2016 2:36 pm; edited 5 times in total

**Dane Siph** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 5:04 pm

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

Bump for review

**Yoshino Freljord** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 6:59 pm

Epithet :

The Absolute Zero

Guild :

Blue Pegasus

Rank :

B-rank

Experience :

132,500

Class :

Warlock

Magic :

Frost Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Constitution :

1

Endurance :

1

Intelligence :

86

Mana :

900

Hey there! Let's get these spells started and ready to go.

Mist Shield:
- Please state that it can block up to a single D-Rank spell, not an attack.
- Change the range to 0.5 meters to 1 meter at most, because 2 meters makes no sense. If you don't change it, then you'll have to be running to punch the said mist before it can harden into water.
Mist Field:
- Again, please state that it can block up to a single D-Rank spell, not just an attack.
- How fast is this spell going? State the speed of the spell too.
- This isn't so much as wrong, just something to clarify. If possible, I'd like you to replace your mana cost with "25 | 25". The first 25 indicates that it's the initial cost whereas the second 25 stands for the sustained cost per turn.
Triple Mist Slice:
- Note that they're incapable of dealing damage at 1 meter.
- State clearly that each wave deals 1/3 or 33.3% of a D-Rank damage. If they all hit, then 1 D-Rank worth of damage is inflicted.
Mist Jets:
- Please state how far you're going to be propel and at what speeds will you be going at.
Mist Bullets:
- State that each bullet hit will deal 25% of D-Rank damage whilst hitting all 4 results in D-Rank damage.
- How fast is this spell traveling at? Please state that.

Remove the [Done] from your title and DO NOT add it back. Once you are complete, simply bump the thread. If I do not reply within 24 hours time, post this in the Staff Review section once more.

**Dane Siph** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 8:48 pm

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

Bump for a review

**Yoshino Freljord** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 8:55 pm

Epithet :

The Absolute Zero

Guild :

Blue Pegasus

Rank :

B-rank

Experience :

132,500

Class :

Warlock

Magic :

Frost Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Constitution :

1

Endurance :

1

Intelligence :

86

Mana :

900

So this is just to clarify because I don't want you starting at a disadvantage. Majority of this site operates using meters per second (MPS). In your spells above, you've stated MPH (miles per hour) and meters per hour.

To have your spell move at 2.5 meters per hour isn't ideal; that's the longest spell I've ever seen. It might take a whole topic before reaching the destination! So let's change all your current metric units to meters per second (MPS).

For Mist Jets, I'd like you to put the 5 meters in the range and change the 10 miles to a 4 meters or so. 10 miles is roughly 4.4 meters. So that's that.

Upon completion, bump the thread for a review!

**Dane Siph** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 9:12 pm

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

Bump for a review

**Yoshino Freljord** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 9:32 pm

Epithet :

The Absolute Zero

Guild :

Blue Pegasus

Rank :

B-rank

Experience :

132,500

Class :

Warlock

Magic :

Frost Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Constitution :

1

Endurance :

1

Intelligence :

86

Mana :

900

Your last spell, Mist Bullets, still has meters per hour. Change that to seconds and we're good to go!

**Dane Siph** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 9:35 pm

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

oops sorry will do

**Yoshino Freljord** · Fri Oct 21, 2016 9:38 pm

Epithet :

The Absolute Zero

Guild :

Blue Pegasus

Rank :

B-rank

Experience :

132,500

Class :

Warlock

Magic :

Frost Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Constitution :

1

Endurance :

1

Intelligence :

86

Mana :

900

Please revert the 7 meters per second back to 5 and below. 7 is simply too fast, reaching the maximum range before a second is up.

Bump upon completion.

**Dane Siph** · Sat Oct 22, 2016 8:07 am

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

bump for review

**Yoshino Freljord** · Sat Oct 22, 2016 8:44 am

Epithet :

The Absolute Zero

Guild :

Blue Pegasus

Rank :

B-rank

Experience :

132,500

Class :

Warlock

Magic :

Frost Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Constitution :

1

Endurance :

1

Intelligence :

86

Mana :

900

Congratulations, your spells have been approved.

Geb · Sat Oct 22, 2016 12:18 pm

Epithet :

The Maleficent Collector

Guild :

Phantom Lord

Jewels :

0

Rank :

B-rank

Race :

Demon

Experience :

200,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Strength :

49

Speed :

6

Endurance :

1

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

1400

Unnaproved. I'm going to have to ask you to remove any and all mentions of spell speeds from your spells.

**Dane Siph** · Sat Oct 22, 2016 2:37 pm

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

bump for review :|

**Dane Siph** · Sun Oct 23, 2016 5:08 am

Guild :

Lamia Scale

Jewels :

25,000

Rank :

D-Rank

Experience :

2,500

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Mist Fall Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Endurance :

2

Intelligence :

1

Mana :

200

bump for review

**Yoshino Freljord** · Mon Oct 24, 2016 1:28 pm

Epithet :

The Absolute Zero

Guild :

Blue Pegasus

Rank :

B-rank

Experience :

132,500

Class :

Warlock

Magic :

Frost Magic

Strength :

1

Speed :

1

Constitution :

1

Endurance :

1

Intelligence :

86

Mana :

900

Congratulations, your spells have been approved.

Dane's Starter Spells

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