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POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS]

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#1Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Thu Jan 11, 2018 6:30 am

Aniz
Name: Dark Tornado
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Dark Power
Type: Offensive
Element: Darkness
Range: 5 meters
Cooldown: 1 posts
Duration: Instant
Effect:  By raising one, or both, of his hands, the user can activate this spell. Once activated, User can create air from surrounding and makes a tornado of dark magic. The enemy take D-Rank damage on direct hit of this tornado. The area damaged is cutting and is in range of 1 meter diameter and those who are standing near the enemy also gets some damage with this attack.
While using Satan Soul, the user creates an enormous tornado, hitting targets near him with great force. This spell is at least 5 meter high and 1 meter diameter in width.

Name: Soul Shower
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Dark power
Type: Offensive
Element: Darkness
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: By raising one of his hands, the user can activate this spell. Once activated, User was able to hurls a huge soul mass which splits into smaller souls that rain from above and explodes to rain over the area in front of the caster. This spell does a cutting damage in a range of 1 meter diameter. This spell does a D-rank damage to the enemy. Useful against larger enemies.

Name: Daedric Tomb
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Dark power
Type: Offensive
Element: Darkness
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: By raising one of his hands, the user can activate this spell. Once activated, User was able to surprise the enemy by placing 3 volatile Daedric caltrops that explode when an enemy comes close, it does a D-rank damage which blasts away the enemy. It damages the enemy in the range of 1 meter diameter. It will allow the user to choose the centre-point around which the mines are placed. The user can place the mines in any area within the range as he/she wants. It does a blasting damage because of the mines on the land which can be seen only by the User.  

Name: Self Augmentation
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Dark power's
Type: Self-Bluff
Element: Darkness
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Sustain
Effect: By raising one of his hands, the user can activate this spell. Once activated, User was able to activate a spell which casts over user's body and creates a dark region over user's body and raise's his speed. It is a D-rank buff spell and have a long duration until the user is out of mana and this spell also help to increase the speed of the spells which the user can use.

Name: Demonic Lightning
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Dark Power’s
Type: Offensive
Element: Darkness
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: By raising one of his hands, the user can activate this spell. Once activated, User was able to instantly releasing a single target bolt of black and red lightning. Although it looks like lightning and acts very much like electricity, the spell itself is actually of the Darkness element. The bolt can only damage in the area of 1 meter diameter. It can cause piercing damage. This does a D-rank damage to the opponent.



Last edited by Aniz on Mon Jan 29, 2018 9:13 pm; edited 10 times in total

#2Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Thu Jan 11, 2018 6:56 am

Venus Rosé

Hello, I'll be grading your spells.

Elemental Manipulation:

  • Denied.
  • Firstly, since you're a battlemage, you're not allowed to have defensive spells. Second, you cannot control every elements that are travelling towards you, that's just god-modding. You can push spells away from you, but you can't control any spells at all.
  • You also cannot combine multiple types of spell within one, if a spell is an Offensive type, it will only do damage. If you want to push spells away from you, that has to be made in a different spell and it will be a Supplementary type.
  • Note that you are to train this spell yourself in a separate thread, the C-Rank slot is not for free.


Satan's Power:

  • Denied.
  • I've already mentioned in your application that spells like these aren't allowed unless you have a limited magic purchased from the shop.
  • Also, D-Rank spells have 1 post cooldown. C-Rank spells have 2 posts cooldown.


Crystal Blast:

    "... User was able to pull out a powerful spell from the sky."

  • What is the powerful spell from the sky? Describe and clarify.
  • Your magic doesn't have the element of Fire to do any kind of burning damage. Remove it.
  • As I mentioned before, you cannot have different types of spell combined into one. Immobilzing an opponent counts as a Supplementary spell and doing damage is an Offensive spell. Choose one.

    "...This spell can be used 5 times in a battle."

  • Nope. Since it's not a Sustain spell, you can only use once in a post and the spell will only do 1 D-Rank damage maximum.
  • Cooldown is 1 post.


Rune Cage:

  • Immobilizing an enemy doesn't count as an Offensive spell. What you wrote is basically a Supplementary spell and cannot do any kinds of damage to the opponent.
  • Give dimensions to the spell.
  • Cooldown is 1 post.
  • You don't give the number of times to be used. Whether it is Instant or Sustain, you can only use the spell once per post.


Suppression Field:

  • Denied.
  • Since you're a Battlemage, you cannot make a De-buff spell that removes effects on your body.
  • Stunning someone is a Supplementary spell and we don't use seconds in spells descriptions. If someone is stunned, the duration is one post and that's it.

    "...Enemy will silenced rather than stunned."

  • What'd you mean by silenced? Are they not able to use any spells? Elaborate.

    "...The Globe also damages enemies for 10 Magic damage every 1 second."

  • Remove it. No specific numbers are required. If it's a D-Rank offensive spell, it will do D-Rank damage to the enemy.
  • Cooldown is 1 post and remove the number of times being used in battle, it's unnecessary.


Bump when edits are made. You're able to have 1 more D-Rank spell for starters, feel free to make an extra one. These do not require you to train.



#3Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Thu Jan 11, 2018 11:13 pm

Aniz
I'm done with fixing the spell's now u can check them

https://www.fairytailrp.com/t47002-power-of-darkness-or-satanstarter-spells

:)

#4Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Fri Jan 12, 2018 8:35 pm

Venus Rosé

Dark Tornado:

  • A D-rank spell will only do D-Rank damage, not "high-ranked damage". Edit it.
  • If you want your spell to be an AoE, the range of it should be 1 meter diameter.

    "...those who are standing near the enemy also gets some damage with this attack."

  • Remove this. If they're not within the 1 meter diameter range, they won't receive any damage.
  • Give dimensions of this spell.


Absorption Field:

  • Denied.
  • I already told you that you're not allowed to create any Defensive spells due to your class. Change it.


Daederic Tomb:

  • I don't understand what this spell is about at all. Clarify and re-word the spell's description.


Rune Cage:

    "...The disorient is broken if the enemy take the direct hit and damages him a little."

  • Remove this. The enemy can break through the orb if they have an Offensive spell of the same rank or if their physical strength is higher than D-Rank.
  • Give dimensions of this spell.


Suppression Field:

  • Denied.
  • You don't have De-buff spell in your class to create a spell like that. Read what I mentioned in the previous post.


Bump when done.



#5Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Sat Jan 13, 2018 7:54 am

Aniz

#6Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Sun Jan 14, 2018 10:33 pm

Venus Rosé

Dark Tornado:

  • The tornado can travel up to 5 meters range, but the AoE damage will only be 1 meter diameter.
  • It's not just 1 meters, it's 1 meter diameter.
  • Give dimensions of the tornado.
  • What kind of damage does it do? Bludgeoning, cutting, etc.


Soul Shower:

  • How big is this large mass of souls?
  • As stated above, the spell can travel up to 5 meters but it will only do damage within 1 meter diameter.
  • State the damage and the damage type.


Daederic Tomb:

  • I still don't get what you're trying to say in the spell's description. Stop using first person (mine, I, me, we, etc.), it makes everything confusing.
  • Does the spell place the user inside the tomb and make him invulnerable to attacks? If so, how is it an offensive spell?


Rune Cage:

  • Give the dimensions of the spell.
  • The requirements of the spell has to be the same with the rest, either Satan's Power or Dark Power.


Devastate:

  • I was contacted by a member that you had copied the exact spell description without their permission. I don't recommend replicating spells without someone's consent and if you wish to make a similar spell, write it to your own's creativity.


Bump when edited.



#7Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Wed Jan 17, 2018 5:58 am

Aniz



"I am not alone. I can hear them... I can hear everyone's voices... I can sense everyone's feelings... I am not alone... Everyone's feelings... They support me... They are what give me the will to stand and fight!!"
#8Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Fri Jan 19, 2018 10:24 pm

Venus Rosé

Dark Tornado:

  • Where is the dimensions of the spell? The width, height, etc.
  • The spell can have a range of 5 meters, but it will do damage within 1 meter diameter.


Soul Shower:

  • Approved.


Daederic Tomb:

  • What kind of damage does this spell do?


Blackout:

  • Denied.
  • I've already mentioned multiple times that teleportation spells/portals aren't allowed unless you have a limited magic with the same attributes.


Demonic Gate:

  • I'm not going to repeat again. Denied.


Bump when done.



#9Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Tue Jan 23, 2018 7:38 am

Aniz



"I am not alone. I can hear them... I can hear everyone's voices... I can sense everyone's feelings... I am not alone... Everyone's feelings... They support me... They are what give me the will to stand and fight!!"
#10Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Sun Jan 28, 2018 12:44 am

Venus Rosé

Dark Tornado:

  • Maximum range of a D-Rank spell is 5 meters, please reduce the height.
  • Remove 'high travelling speed' from the description, every spell travels at a specific speed at 20 m/s.


Daederic Tomb:

  • Approved.


Self-Augmentation:

  • Your entire description is unnecessary. Just state the motion to initiate the spell, how it looks and that it gives D-Rank Speed Buff to the user.
  • Buffs are sustained most of the time, feel free to change the duration.


Demonic Lightning:

    "...This spell gives high damage if hits the target directly."

  • Remove this. Whether the spell lands directly or not, it will deal the same damage.


Bump when edited.



#11Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Sun Jan 28, 2018 5:37 am

Aniz
https://www.fairytailrp.com/t47002-power-of-darkness-or-satanstarter-spells#398742


bumped :( and can you approve them fast i wanna take part in event quest



"I am not alone. I can hear them... I can hear everyone's voices... I can sense everyone's feelings... I am not alone... Everyone's feelings... They support me... They are what give me the will to stand and fight!!"
#12Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Sun Jan 28, 2018 9:58 pm

Venus Rosé

Daederic Bomb:

  • What is removing arming delay?
  • Remove that it can only been seen by the user. It should be able to be detected with a sensory spell.


Self-Augmentation:

  • You can only use the buff for speed only, not for every statistic, as stated for your class.
  • Change the Duration to Sustain.


Don’t ask me to approve things fast. If your spells don’t fit according to our rules, I won’t approve it unless edited. Bump when done.



#13Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Mon Jan 29, 2018 5:25 am

Aniz



"I am not alone. I can hear them... I can hear everyone's voices... I can sense everyone's feelings... I am not alone... Everyone's feelings... They support me... They are what give me the will to stand and fight!!"
#14Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Mon Jan 29, 2018 7:28 am

Venus Rosé

Daederic Tomb:

    "...This spell can only seen by the user."

    "...which can be seen only by the User."

  • Remove it.


Self-Augmentation:

  • Approved.



#15Aniz 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Mon Jan 29, 2018 9:14 pm

Aniz



"I am not alone. I can hear them... I can hear everyone's voices... I can sense everyone's feelings... I am not alone... Everyone's feelings... They support me... They are what give me the will to stand and fight!!"
#16Venus Rosé 

POWER OF DARKNESS OR SATAN[STARTER SPELLS] Empty Tue Jan 30, 2018 11:54 pm

Venus Rosé

These spells have been approved.



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