Selena's Water Dragon Slayer Starters

Selena Maelstrom · Sat Nov 05, 2016 12:21 pm

Jewels :

780,000

Rank :

B-Rank

Experience :

118,750

Class :

Trickster

Aura :

Seated's Might

Strength :

21

Speed :

36

Endurance :

9

Intelligence :

16

Mana :

1,000

Name: Aqua Jet
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Water Dragon Slayer
Type: Supplementary
Element: Water
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Instant
Effect: After Selena says jet, she is carried by a torrent of water from her feet up to 5 meters from where she casted this spell in a single direction.

Name: Whirl
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Water Dragon Slayer
Type: Offensive
Element: Water
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Sustain
Effect: By moving a finger in a spinning motion, Selena creates a a whirling mass of water from her fingertip, similar to a whirlpool. The whirlpool spins so fast that it deals D rank damage upon contact. This spell is 1m3 and can go a maximum of 5 Meters.

Name: Geyser
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Water Dragon Slayer
Type: Defensive
Element: Water
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Sustain
Effect: Selena Taps her foot on the ground. From where her foot tapped a surge of water comes up. This acts as a large barrier of 3 meters tall and 1 meter thick and can take up to d rank damage. The geyser is formed from her foot and after tapping it places the water on the ground to then surge up.

Name: Water Pulse
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Water Dragon Slayer
Type: offensive
Element: Water
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Sustain
Effect: Selena thrusts her arm outwards. A surge of water comes forth from her hand once completed dealing D rank damage to anything hit by it. It is 1m3 and can travel up to 5 meters.

Name: Tail of the Water Dragon
Rank: D
Mana Cost: 25
Requirements: Water Dragon Slayer
Type: Offensive
Element: Water
Range: 5 Meters
Cooldown: 1 Posts
Duration: Sustain
Effect: With a flick of the wrist Selena creates 2 large water arms, covering her own. This arm deals 1/2 D rank damage. The water covers the entirety of her arms.

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Last edited by Selena Maelstrom on Wed Jan 11, 2017 2:07 pm; edited 14 times in total

**Bianca Fleur †** · Tue Nov 15, 2016 6:07 pm

Jewels :

175,000

Rank :

S-Rank

Race :

Human

Experience :

515,000

Reputation :

11,700

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Blood Magic

Strength :

94

Speed :

61

Constitution :

61

Endurance :

66

Intelligence :

31

Mana :

2,870

Hello, I'll be reviewing your spells. Please fix the following errors:

All your mana costs are wrong. A D-rank spell costs 25 mana, fix that.
Aqua Jet: Add in the fact that it can only take you in one direction.
Whirl: State what exactly this whirlpool does. It sounds more like a supplementary than an offensive, unless you elaborate on how it actually does damage.
Scales of the Water Dragon: ✓
Water Pulse: State the source of the surge. Remove 'meter'. '1m3' should suffice for the dimensions of your spell.
Tail of the Water Dragon: Isn't 1 meter a bit too thick to hold (assuming that this is the width of the whip)? State if there is something thinner to grip on, like a hilt.

Bump when done.

Selena Maelstrom · Wed Nov 16, 2016 10:17 am

Jewels :

780,000

Rank :

B-Rank

Experience :

118,750

Class :

Trickster

Aura :

Seated's Might

Strength :

21

Speed :

36

Endurance :

9

Intelligence :

16

Mana :

1,000

bump

**Bianca Fleur †** · Wed Nov 16, 2016 2:23 pm

Jewels :

175,000

Rank :

S-Rank

Race :

Human

Experience :

515,000

Reputation :

11,700

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Blood Magic

Strength :

94

Speed :

61

Constitution :

61

Endurance :

66

Intelligence :

31

Mana :

2,870

Alright, just a few more to fix:

Aqua Jet: ✓
Whirl: How is it controlled if it's sustained? Also mention that it can only do 1 D-rank damage in total per post.
Water Pulse: ✓
Tail of the Water Dragon: Mention that you can only make one arm and if you decide to make 2 arms each arm would deal 1/2 D-rank damage.
Please replace "1m3 meter" with just "1m3".

Bump when done.

Selena Maelstrom · Wed Nov 16, 2016 3:25 pm

Jewels :

780,000

Rank :

B-Rank

Experience :

118,750

Class :

Trickster

Aura :

Seated's Might

Strength :

21

Speed :

36

Endurance :

9

Intelligence :

16

Mana :

1,000

sorry all fixed

Bump~

**Bianca Fleur †** · Wed Nov 16, 2016 5:36 pm

Jewels :

175,000

Rank :

S-Rank

Race :

Human

Experience :

515,000

Reputation :

11,700

Class :

Sorcerer

Magic :

Blood Magic

Strength :

94

Speed :

61

Constitution :

61

Endurance :

66

Intelligence :

31

Mana :

2,870

Congratulations, these spells have been approved.

**Hikaru Nakamura** · Tue Jan 10, 2017 11:03 pm

Epithet :

The First Class Singularity

Jewels :

115,000

Rank :

A-rank

Race :

Human

Experience :

346,700

Class :

Spellsword

Aura :

Lieutenant's Might

Magic :

Lightning Magic

Strength :

41

Speed :

41

Constitution :

41

Endurance :

26

Intelligence :

11

Mana :

1,655

Unapproved, spells must be revised for not complying with DS rules.

Selena Maelstrom · Tue Jan 10, 2017 11:26 pm

Jewels :

780,000

Rank :

B-Rank

Experience :

118,750

Class :

Trickster

Aura :

Seated's Might

Strength :

21

Speed :

36

Endurance :

9

Intelligence :

16

Mana :

1,000

Bump~

**Roman** · Sun Jan 15, 2017 12:05 pm

Guild :

Phantom Lord

Jewels :

0

Rank :

B-Rank

Experience :

192,500

Class :

Trickster

Magic :

-

Strength :

24

Speed :

11

Endurance :

11

Intelligence :

16

Mana :

1050

Congratulations, these spells have been reapproved.

Selena's Water Dragon Slayer Starters

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